Writing the Conclusion
Example of a well-structured conclusion:
Social media has changed the impact of civil unrest by allowing participants to shape their
own stories, without needing to go through official channels or depend on friendly contacts
in major media. In contrast, newspapers are able to spend more time on the official and
long-term story of the events. However, often these reports now include the moment-by-
moment stories as told via social media, greatly increasing the impact of that medium. In
the future, our ability to understand events in greater depth may depend on the
opportunity to preserve these fleeting tweets, updates and stories told on platforms
designed to be transient, rather than leaving such depth of analysis exclusively in the realm
of the more standard media outlets.
Broken Down
Explained
Social media has changed the impact of
civil unrest by allowing participants to
shape their own stories, without
needing to go through official channels
or depend on friendly contacts in major
media. In contrast, newspapers are able
to spend more time on the official and
long-term story of the events.
Here the student has synthesised their
main points to present their overall
argument
However, often these reports now include
the moment-by-moment stories as told via
social media, greatly increasing the impact
of that medium.
Student clearly shows what their overall
conclusion is.
In the future, our ability to understand
events in greater depth may depend on
the opportunity to preserve these fleeting
tweets, updates and stories told on
platforms designed to be transient, rather
than leaving such depth of analysis
exclusively in the realm of the more
standard media outlets.
Here the student looks to the future. Whilst
they have concluded their own essay they
have also suggested where further
discussion could be focussed.
Adapted from The University of Manchester Library, My Learning Essentials, Never a wasted word: Writing your essay (Creative Commons
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